Potentials:
Your poem is amazing. I can hear your voice very clear. This is very consonant with what you expressed the first day of class. I liked very much that your incorporated three different points of views in this poem; your own, the system, and the kids.
Challenges:
Write more poems like this in the future.
Thank you Marcella. That was the idea, to make the reader visualize something at the beginning, but at the end change what he/she had in mind. In effect, this poem is about a computer. I agree with you about the Two thousand and zero, but if I take this out, I feel that the rhyme of my poem falls. Also the pattern on the amount of syllables is…[Read more]
