CUNY Academic Commons | Dhipinder Walia | Activity https://commons.gc.cuny.edu/members/dhipinderwalia/activity/ Activity feed for Dhipinder Walia. Sat, 01 Jan 2050 18:00:18 -0500 https://buddypress.org/?v= en 30 hourly 2 81c54f8ab2a2944ebebe1045f2ef6127 Dhipinder Walia is attending Activism, Archives & Education Workshop. https://commons.gc.cuny.edu/activity/p/744517/ Fri, 19 Feb 2021 01:14:41 -0500 d9c29ea71e77f579a0cbd3db609e3031 Dhipinder Walia is attending Activism, Archives & Education Panel. https://commons.gc.cuny.edu/activity/p/744516/ Fri, 19 Feb 2021 01:14:40 -0500 6885cf0393b852546e87d9e1cbc2affd Dhipinder Walia wrote a new post on the site Visible Pedagogy https://vp.commons.gc.cuny.edu/?p=2234 Thu, 14 May 2020 17:46:14 -0400 By Dhipinder Walia

I prepare for a new semester the same way I imagine so many of us do: with a syllabus of hopes and commitments, a notebook of cool ideas shared by colleagues on campus, posts from Visible […]

]]> 6dd944830786e2f6201a322916c56d28 Dhipinder Walia wrote a new post on the site Visible Pedagogy https://vp.commons.gc.cuny.edu/?p=2193 Wed, 01 Apr 2020 14:13:17 -0400 by Dhipinder Walia

On paper, I love collaborative learning and writing. I understand peer-editing creates possibilities for student-centered revision practices. Similarly, I have experienced the space group […]

]]> f9904d693af22c3e5037a7c26eca47fa Dhipinder Walia wrote a new post on the site Visible Pedagogy https://vp.commons.gc.cuny.edu/?p=2041 Wed, 15 Jan 2020 18:48:04 -0500 by Dhipinder Walia

Dr. Asao Inoue, professor at the University of Washington-Tacoma, plainly shared with his Conference on College Composition & Communication (4Cs) audience:  “Let me compassionately urge yo […]

]]> 4c15d79550174b0db7beb5f8933f6331 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Revisiting Tom Wolfe’s Bronx “Jungle”, on the site The Literary Bronx https://literarybronx.commons.gc.cuny.edu/tom-wolfes-bronx-jungle/#comment-32 Wed, 23 Oct 2019 22:24:21 -0400 Thank you for writing this Hardik. In my Art and Thought of the 1980s class at the Graduate Center, we just wrapped a discussion of Bonfire of the Vanities. I’ve learned even more through your thoughtful analysis […]

]]> fb558c3e8e39504f180e0cd75e117e28 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Dialogue Post, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/05/dialogue-post/#comment-467 Mon, 14 Oct 2019 21:10:47 -0400 Jay sounds like a complicated and rich character. Start thinking about how you’ll be able to SHOW his dysfunctional marriage without telling us it is dysfunctional. Remember, it is not your job to JUDGE the […]

]]> 7f246920704fc5ac212e73768b75a248 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Dialogue, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/05/dialogue-5/#comment-466 Mon, 14 Oct 2019 21:05:18 -0400 I love that the comment about wanting money instead of gift becomes a metaphor for an internal conflict within their relationship. Try to stay with that specific conflict a bit more before you shift to having them […]

]]> 9dd242589b7fec0d011bb93805e49f9d Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Imagery, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/07/imagery-4/#comment-465 Mon, 14 Oct 2019 21:03:12 -0400 I’m happy to see you’re making your character’s fear of public speaking more concrete.

]]> ef6d1c77433b92d1b1287e8f9ff925d9 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Setting, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/07/setting-7/#comment-464 Mon, 14 Oct 2019 21:02:26 -0400 Thanks for getting this in. Hope it will be useful to you as you work on your short story.

]]> 6b397e5e2497b397d2e514fd537abe9c Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Plot vs. Story (Timeline of Events), on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/11/plot-vs-story-timeline-of-events/#comment-463 Mon, 14 Oct 2019 21:01:51 -0400 I think you’re confusing story/plot/scene.. The idea of this assignment was to have you outline what scenes you’ll have in your story and when you’ll incorporate flashbacks. So for instance, when you write “Wife […]

]]> 4d431c614b47182db989bf2d3344fd80 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Scene, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/09/scene-2/#comment-462 Mon, 14 Oct 2019 20:59:15 -0400 Thanks Martha. Just remember, you want to maintain ONE point of view otherwise the story is hard to understand. So in the beginning you write “She was standing…” then you slip into “I went to class” the first […]

]]> 0819cb13423d436c9d2b0d6268b3f663 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Scene- 7/11, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/05/scene-7-11/#comment-461 Mon, 14 Oct 2019 20:57:34 -0400 Why is Lien buying anti-freeze!! I am so curious to know. I also am fascinated by Sweetness being so impatient here. It makes me want to reread the story to see if part of the reason she appears to be […]

]]> 4d39bf857add1a039a7bbca404166e76 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Outlined, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/09/outlined/#comment-460 Mon, 14 Oct 2019 20:47:21 -0400 Good plan! Looking forward to seeing how it looks on the page!
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]]> b18de3420bc5a0f9adc05b4c8369c728 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Dialogue, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/09/dialogue-6/#comment-459 Mon, 14 Oct 2019 20:46:52 -0400 What would happen if you started your scene with “He is my professor” and have them talk to each other the way they would without the readers present. For instance, if I have a story about two friends and one is […]

]]> 82e02a22502589adf1dadac3cbabcba3 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Characters, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/09/characters-2/#comment-458 Mon, 14 Oct 2019 20:41:43 -0400 Good start- think about how you’ll show Katherine is “strong” but “sweet.” Also, how will you show Michael wants to quit his job without telling us this…how can you show dissatisfaction?

]]> e161369ffd6035c2089690596125983a Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Character Build, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/05/character-build/#comment-457 Mon, 14 Oct 2019 20:40:05 -0400 Curious about the difference between the two characters’ voices. One is honeyed and untrustworthy, the other is “modulated” and more trustworthy. Cool to think about specific words and tones you can use in […]

]]> a22ee3e9af0934e6aae24577081d6532 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, 7-Eleven, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/05/7-eleven-2/#comment-449 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 03:20:52 -0400 OMG ! I am so with the metaphor of choosing between White Chocolate and Reeses. Very clever. I also appreciate her indecision that is shown through her inability to pick food items. Good work!

]]> 2dd86eea8d71ded51f8b78fbcfd126b9 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Best Friends, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/05/best-friends/#comment-448 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 03:19:29 -0400 Tense scene you’ve got here. I think you run into a little on the nose dialogue when Jenna says exactly why she tells his girlfriend that he’s not worth her time, but I can see some subtext in the lines before that.

]]> 219032f4ffc9db373724b73d2f9d9400 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Craft Element: Dialogue, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/05/craft-element-dialogue/#comment-447 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 03:12:50 -0400 You did a great job Gio. I think your scene could start with this line of dialogue though: “And what of this dark-haired man that the Sighters speak of?”

I think the dialogue picks up steam when they talk ARO […]

]]> 9fce5c8de74fb29a2ba619efd5d6996e Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Prompt #2: Setting , on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/09/26/prompt-2-setting/#comment-446 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 03:10:13 -0400 Favorite line: Crossing the street and narrowly avoiding getting hit by a dingy, yellow cab, Dante walks briskly pass the many horses and hot dog carts lining the entrance to Central Park.

So much there. And in […]

]]> b1c476ec467d7ed2314dc2123757c700 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Characters, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/09/27/characters/#comment-445 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 03:08:11 -0400 Curious if this is the story you’ll pursue? Roberto needs a small, tangible want that he can work towards that represents “retaining modest roots” Wanting to obtain an antique, or wanting to visit some old […]

]]> c63fe7b59381adee04df310597ad3038 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Craft Element: Character, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/09/27/craft-element-character/#comment-444 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 03:06:38 -0400 Nicola wants SO much! It’s admirable, but I wonder what you’ll follow in your story? I was mentioning this to Peter, but I always think of Parks and Rec and the way Amy Poehler’s character wants to improve Pawnee […]

]]> d7057870ad2998d6271152f17f8b26ea Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Character, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/04/character-7/#comment-443 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 02:53:37 -0400 Thanks, Amy. I’ll look forward to you fleshing this out more when you write your short story.

]]> 2360115fabb9ec277168dc641a1ed0c7 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Imagery Prompt, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/09/26/imagery-prompt/#comment-442 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 02:52:22 -0400 Improved visual descriptions here– Who is the narrator? Is it third person? Or is it someone who knows her?

]]> 47adbffca7e235dc1decaa6bb5c3ce2f Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Setting Prompt, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/09/26/setting-prompt/#comment-441 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 02:51:37 -0400 I’m interested in this character whose first reaction to a suicide news update is to say “I hate Kingsbridge” it makes me think she blames Kingsbridge for the news and doesn’t really think of the individuals who […]

]]> 8cb2570cad3ae9e14992125260535095 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Dialogue, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/04/dialogue-4/#comment-440 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 02:50:01 -0400 The “bad dialogue” line isn’t bad here- it works! congrats! I have a hard time buying that two people who are close would forget that the other lost her parents. I’ll be curious to hear more about the dynamic of […]

]]> 77f63008df67aa75889b7bec3aa74157 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, 711 scene, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/03/711-scene/#comment-439 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 02:48:36 -0400 I’m curious to see if a lot of David’s interest in Lien has to do with his guilt over not having a relationship with his own daughter. Great way to SHOW us his guilt without telling us..

]]> ba840710779fa769accceeb992d2fa40 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, 7-Eleven, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/03/7-eleven/#comment-438 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 02:46:54 -0400 You’ve set the stage! All of these characters clearly have a need to go to 7-11. I wonder what will happen when their worlds collide.

]]> b9d112ad50b47d0d62c7018ae699e75e Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, , on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/03/766/#comment-437 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 02:46:04 -0400 I don’t follow Sweetness’ reaction here, but I’m glad you have a scene with action + dialogue. Just a tip– you put in the narrative that Steve apologizes, so there’s not really a need to repeat it in dialogue.

]]> ede948dad64032ec42f00bf144af3f2a Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Scene, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/03/scene/#comment-436 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 02:44:48 -0400 I wonder why Lien feels comfortable talking to Lucy and Sweetness about giving her baby away?

]]> 544580c207b7730085905077a6c1784b Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Scene w/ Lien & Sweetness, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/03/scene-w-lien-sweetness/#comment-435 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 02:44:04 -0400 Interesting that Sweetness is judgmental about Lien’s child’s father– technically based on what we read, Lien’s child’s father is white– I wonder what Sweetness would want to say about that.

]]> 8cae6506b30f62f97971595d516a91d7 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Old Beginnings, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/05/old-beginnings/#comment-434 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 02:42:36 -0400 I think you start showing A LOT in your last paragraph– when you mention she made a mental note to hire gardeners and didn’t want to step into grass unless she could see her toes that’s all showing us she wants a […]

]]> 9b4d4cc9d2f1d1465a3a95234584b747 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, , on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/03/761/#comment-433 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 02:34:06 -0400 I’m not sure I totally follow what’s going in this scene. I think Sweetness and Lien are friends who bumped into Destinee?

]]> 5ec22729af00bda7806c5983ac402be5 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, 10/3 Class Scene Exercise, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/03/10-3-class-scene-exercise/#comment-432 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 02:33:05 -0400 Ha Ha. I love that Sweetness is a supervisor and Georgia’s nemesis. I’d be curious to know why they don’t get along, other than maybe what we know about Sweetness from Morrison’s story. Curious description of […]

]]> a01b72166d2629db0d32f38ca82dd68b Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Seven Eleven Discussion, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/03/seven-eleven-discussion/#comment-431 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 02:31:04 -0400 I love this! So smart to make them all bond over questions on motherhood. You also do a great job of letting them all speak on an idea without telling us anything about who they are and yet I feel like I know them so well!

]]> 5ef0912a82b4e11e9a6b3e3b0870ca2e Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, scene lien sweetness, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/03/scene-lien-sweetness/#comment-430 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 02:29:19 -0400 Cool encounter. I see you’re especially interested in Sweetness’ distance from “current” slang. We feel her disconnect from time in Morrison’s story as well.

]]> e37ed41be1da0afd90bcb9983afd5c00 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Lien, Sweetness and Michael Scene, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/03/lien-sweetness-and-michael-scene/#comment-429 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 02:27:44 -0400 I love that Sweetness is a social worker here and Lien works as a cashier. A tip– since you said it has been so long since they’ve seen each other, no need to have Michael say it dialogue as well.

]]> bf111fbd831955ff65c0628e9b9c017b Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Plot, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/04/plot/#comment-428 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 02:21:22 -0400 I’m not sure your flashback after a murder is effective unless Madison will be in the flashback as well? Also, is #3 part of the flashback? I get a little confused with the order here. I also wonder if there’s a […]

]]> d00ddbc97b2ad959c5a15b788de656db Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Character, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/03/character-6/#comment-427 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 02:16:54 -0400 Your whole story could be David at the graduation trying to get Laura this journal and I think ALL of the themes you note here of loss, inaction, frustration, would be implied and come through.

Can’t wait to […]

]]> 6f00ed89ead6cf8455ba6d0652619c4d Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Character Prompt, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/03/character-prompt-3/#comment-426 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 02:15:14 -0400 I want to know why Joseph wants to break up with his girlfriend!

]]> 49455316b0650ac6c1eef5d81de5a33f Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Character, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/10/03/character-5/#comment-425 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 02:14:32 -0400 Mayor Hanover has got her work cut out for her! I wonder if you could give her a concrete want that would represent her “success” or feeling like she is moving towards fixing the many societal ills you note here. […]

]]> 9f9cadc3a3dcd833f8cb19fb7be2d7c3 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Character Prompt, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/09/28/character-prompt-2/#comment-424 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 02:11:12 -0400 Good idea to have two characters with conflicting wants. I’m curious to learn more about what draws Rhea to Alvis. I’d also like to get a better sense of what makes her want to stay in the in-between other than […]

]]> f50712780601344e19733fafdfea3fda Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Elise-Imagery prompt, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/09/27/elise-imagery-prompt/#comment-423 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 02:08:24 -0400 I’m curious about the narrator here. It’s like the narrator feels Elise is not an important character to know or maybe that she’s too complicated for readers to understand?

Good idea having Elise describe […]

]]> 1abef200bc8e5c97a4907b09be1cf93d Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Character Prompt, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/09/27/character-prompt/#comment-422 Sat, 05 Oct 2019 01:47:55 -0400 I see the conflict between Jassi and Suni through their conflicting desires. Good work. I would urge you to think of a smaller, more tangible want for Jassi other than “wanting independence.” What THING can she […]

]]> 4954979020ae8a93c5b67b3abc404869 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Dialogue- Prompt 2, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/09/27/dialogue-prompt-2-2/#comment-420 Tue, 01 Oct 2019 17:59:20 -0400 Thanks Lucia. Think about how the last two lines of dialogue here could incorporate some SUBTEXT. For instance, Alejandra SAYS “I am undecided” but is there a way she could NOT SAY THAT but something else that […]

]]> 599c776af369e54922ea25792cc40bfe Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Two Characters, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/09/27/664/#comment-378 Sat, 28 Sep 2019 01:09:44 -0400 Is it possible for Aimee to want something and then through the act of getting that something she learns how to love living in this town without her father? Otherwise, I wonder if it’ll be difficult to write a […]

]]> 9d02c3d2ce4480cb5e0f218cfd76db60 Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Elise and Antonio - character description, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/09/27/elise-antonio-character-description/#comment-377 Sat, 28 Sep 2019 01:07:39 -0400 I appreciate the level of detail you have for Elise’s character. She wants to own a coffee shop but can’t seem to stop shopping making her her own antagonist. This is great! I wonder if you can think more about […]

]]> a541dd307235550ede321db057761b8f Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Character 1&2, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/09/27/character-12/#comment-376 Sat, 28 Sep 2019 01:05:31 -0400 Thanks Tatiana, you’ve got good physical details but your desires are still a bit abstract. What does “face his own problems” mean? Also what specifically does the first character want to find out? and why?

]]> 265be879afbce7b4985cd1f302432a6b Dhipinder Walia commented on the post, Character, on the site Creative Writing @ Lehman College https://creative.commons.gc.cuny.edu/2019/09/27/character-3/#comment-375 Sat, 28 Sep 2019 01:04:24 -0400 I am really glad Kira’s want is in direct conflict with Jesus’ want. Think some more on what other wants Jesus has that have nothing to do with Kira. This will help Jesus become a more developed character.

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